you’re pathetic

Does it hurt when you call me that?

no, because you are pathetic

Look at me when you say it.

you’re pathetic

there were tears in her eyes

she was angelic

I love you

i know.

- kita

I started crying when I read the last two lines.
because I know it's already happened.
and all that there is left to do,
all that there is left to do,
the only thing left to do,
the only thing left to say,

is mourn right. because it's (was) worth it.

but, be grateful. at least she's telling you. most dont have the guts do that much

all that there is left to do
is scream into the void
I hope it leaves,
a beautiful echo

I mourn what's gone
I hope and pray,
that I had left,
a beautiful echo

i screamed at you.

did I leave?
a beautiful echo

i hope there's something,
for it to bounce off,
i want to leave
a beautiful echo.

i want to leave a beautiful echo.
i want you to hear it.

i just don't want to leave.
five more minutes.
please.please.please.please
let me leave, a beautiful echo,
and listen, don't shut,
your ears, your eyes,
just for once would you fucking listen
to my, uh,
beautiful echo?

and you didn't listen before
you wouldn't listen now.
please, something, anything, hear me
and my beautiful echo.

@synu ending to a story I wrote. I can send it to you. I need opinions.

@synu if Q and Sean approve id like it to end up on the darling. First time writing anything erotic. Dialogue is genuinely hard to write. I can write internal dialogue well but I can’t really have a conversation on the page.

Moving forward I’m going to just avoid plot dialogue. It slows down the flow. Unquoted conversations are easier. Either way the more stories I write I think the better my mind will become. The better those skills will also become too.

@Kita unquoted dialogue are an unfathomably based literary device.

I think it should be on the darling.